Problem Sentences

Here are some problem sentences; some needed more revision than others.

1. "Two restroom sites were also salvaged providing toilet and shower facilities."

Two restrooom sites providing toilet and shower facilities were also salvaged.

2. "Additionally, booths hosted hands on activities plus a petting zoo, a rock wall, mechanical bull rides and rides on the miniature train from the Railroad Museum were also available."

Additionally, booths hosted hands-on activities, and a petting zoo, a rock wall, mechanical bull rides, and rides on the miniature train from the Railroad Museum were also available.

3. "The cottage was surrounded by 4' of water during Ike, though sustained only minor damage, another tribute to its endurance."

The cottage's minor damage despite being surrounded by 4' of water during Ike serves as another tribute to its endurance.

4. Jon Doe "has researched its history, with documents and news clippings about its ownership; a single woman owned the home from 1924 into the 1960s, who originally purchased it for $2200."

Jon Doe has researched its history through documents and newsclippings about its ownership; a single woman, who originally purchased it for $2,200, owned the home from 1924 into the 1960s.

5. "So much in common with its sister next door, a freak May windstorm in 2005 brought both places to their knees, knocking them off their piers."

In 2005, a freak May windstorm knocked both houses off their piers.

6. "A colleague with whom I work has chosen to change the building materials in her living area as a result of Ike's passage."

One of my colleagues chose to change the building materials in her living area because of Ike's passage.

7. "Restored cabins on the rim of the canyon and in the Cow Camp area for overnight accommodations."

Guests can stay overnight in restored cabins near the canyon rim and in the Cow Camp.

8. "The Pratt Welcome Center and Gift Shop are where the Garden experience begins offering restroom facilities, meeting spaces, information, refreshments, great garden inspired gifts, and friendly docents."

The Garden experience begins at the Pratt Welcome Center and Gift Shop that offers friendly docents, information, great garden-inspired gifts, refreshments, meeting spaces, and restroom facilities.

9. "Currently there are 10 award winning beaches of which four can proudly fly the prestigious 'Blue Flag Award.'"

Four of our ten award-winning beaches proudly fly the prestigious 'Blue Flag Award.'

10. "Each time I drive past these facilities, I get excited knowing many generations of children will be impacted within the walls of these buildings."

Each time I drive past these facilities, I get exciting knowing that the activities within will influence generations of children.